One of the suggestions that Balboa Press made was that the synopsis of Book One - at the beginning of Book Two could be expanded a little.
I spent around 3 hours working on it yesterday afternoon and finally came up with something that I thought might be effective. Elizabeth was quite impressed and made a few suggestions. Then I ran it by Matthew and he hated it.
But... he was so constructive with his criticism and then sat down with me and spent an hour working on a new, punchier, stronger version.
According to him... I was making the mistake of 'narrating' the story, rather than providing a synopsis. I was so impressed. My son is a gifted IT programmer, but he has shown great writing skills - thanks Matthew.